Monday, June 21, 2010


I haven't gotten very far on this because I've been flipping between first person POV and third. I might post a bit of the first person next week to compare. But look! It's less than 500 words!


Bee said...

Wow, this looks like a new WiP.
Blood? Where did that come from?
Love the details and the dialogue. I can tell there's a lotta mystery involved in this (or then again, maybe my imagination's just running away).


Emilia Plater said...

The voice in this is incredible! “High school is trench-fucking-warfare.” - seriously. I LOVE the way you describe everything - the sky, Charlie's jaw. Awesome teaser!

Karla Nellenbach said...

not to sound like a broken record, but you have such a way with description...when will i see more of this?

Phoebe said...

"the sky a naïve paint-box blue, stretching out forever."


Becca Rogers said...

I know I probably say this every. single. week, but...your details are AMAZING! I'm always sucked in from beginning to end. Love it!

P.S. - Thanks for the kind words on my blog. <33

Bri said...

Your descriptions are ridiculous in the best possible way. Seriously, so vivid and gorgeous. Always love your work!

Vee said...

YOUR PROSE KILLS ME. EVERY TIME. Yeah, the description is beautiful as always: "blooming explosion of color on pale skin."

Just awesome.