Monday, May 10, 2010

Tease!

Happy Tuesday everyone! Here's another snip from band geeks. And look, it's almost at the 500 word count limit! This is still a super rough draft, so beware of misspellings, poor grammar, and sentences that just don't make sense.

13 comments:

Kaitlin Ward said...

Beautiful writing, as always :)

Vee said...

Voice + writing = simply gorgeous :D

Little Miss Allicatt said...

Your dialogue is perfect. And the voice is priceless. First time reading one of your teasers -- following you now!

Bri said...

Gosh, I'm such a romantic, so this made my little heart smile lots and lots :) What a gorgeous scene. I could feel it like I was there. I really loved this.

Oh, and "pretty twist of pink lips" is a beautiful use of language.

Karla Nellenbach said...

nice snip! moreeee please....im waitingggg :)

Glen Akin said...

I'm not much of romantic, and I do admit that I feel a little emotion-overload reading this lol but yeah, I can see why this is going to be a big hit when it gets published, and I am interested in reading more! =D

Annie McElfresh said...

This flowed so well. It was like reading poetry almost. Great work, and your MC really pulls me in.

Lia Victoria said...

What a fluid piece of writing. It was so easy to just go happily along with them :]

Cory said...

I loved the details about the freckles and the nail polish. They make this character come alive. This line is amazing: We would peel off our summer skin and be different people.

Marilyn Almodovar said...

*waves I heart Liz writing banner* I loved this! Such poetry and such nice little details that made me smile. Like this line: It stung, because I was probably more sunburned than I was hoping for, but I wanted her to do it again

Ellen said...

"We would peel off our summer skin and be different people." <-- such a great line! Beautiful prose in this teaser :)

Leah said...

I've never read your writing before, and I love it!
Great voice and flow and descriptions!
Also makes me want to go lie in tall grass somewhere :P

Becca Rogers said...

When they were talking about the world going on and just staying in that same spot, I felt like I was right there with them. :)

Now I want to go lay on some green grass and stare at the sky. loool XD