Monday, March 29, 2010

T-t-tease

I just got back from my pilates class, and I kind of want to die. I have this love/hate relationship with my instructor, or maybe it should be more love/hate. As soon as I get there she's the best thing ever who totally motivates me to lose those five pounds before summer, and by the end I want to die because I can barely breathe and my hair is a mess and I don't look anything like her.
Anyway, because I'm dying from class, I'm crashing and teasing early. I guess technically this is no longer a WIP, because it's in agent's hands but...eh. I have nothing else to tease from. So, this is THE scene. Or as my beta likes to call it, "the nookie scene - aka just stop being a baby and write it already." It went back and forth between us at least four times and I'm still not satisfied. *ahem* no pun intended.

6 comments:

Karla Nellenbach said...

ahhh, the nookie scene! yay...i <3 this! seriously....love the last paragraph especially

ChristaCarol said...

Wow, this was beautiful. Loved it was in his POV. Your descriptions of emotion and everything are vivid. Love his thoughts between Anna and Trish. Well done!

Becca said...

Even though this is a smex/nookie scene, it still feels like I'm reading poetry. Your descriptions are AMAZING. <3

Marilyn Almodovar said...

I loved this, because like everyone has said, it reads like poetry. I love that the description of feelings are so tangible. Love it!

Debra Driza said...

Ahhh, your prose is just beautiful! So evocative! I loved the whole thing, but especially the para that started "The soft pads..." There's a lot of meaning in everything, a deepness that really beckons the reader to pay attention while at the same reveling in the lyrical prose.

This was sooooo good! :D

Annie McElfresh said...

Dude! HAWT!! It flowed well, and I esp love how you put your description together. Like this--->Our wrists press together, two uneven beats eventually mellowing into one.<--- Love it! Awesome job SNS!! :D