Monday, March 1, 2010

T-t-t-easeee

 Tease from the new, nameless, WIP. It's going slowly, because school is overwhelming, but here it is!! CJ is the brother Milo hasn't seen or heard from since he left for college four years ago.
   thanks for being awesome guys!

7 comments:

Debra Driza said...

Wow, some amazing imagery in here! Plus--sad! Love the drowning in vanilla and sugar line, and this one:

I swear,if I can squeeze my eyes tight enough, hold my breath long enough, focus hard enough, I’ll be back there on the beach.

Really great snip! :)

Marilyn Almodovar said...

Love the emotions on this! The descriptions of his longing for Anna are so real and sad. Obviously CJ comes in to change the tone of the excerpt. I'm hooked!

Kathy Bradey said...

I love the regret. The running over the list of what went wrong. I can feel the emotion.

Karla Nellenbach said...

Aw!! Sniff, sniff...you know I love this part, especially where he's thinking of Anna and letting himself believe she's right there with him. So heart-breaking.

Annie McElfresh said...

Aw :( Milo tugs at my old heart strings. But CJ makes me laugh! Great snip.

Amna said...

I can almost FEEl the emotions your MC is feeling. I absolutely loved the image you paint in my mind through your imagery.

FAB teaser <3

Glen Akin said...

I feel so bad for Milo. But CJ does bring some smile on my face, which is good. I didn't want to drown in all the sorrow. I wonder what happened to Anna