Monday, December 7, 2009

Teaser Tuesday!

It's early, as always, because my Tuesdays are crazy. But I promise to get to all yours!
I've managed to catch a cold, the one thing that makes me hate this time of year. Luckily, that means I have to stay in and write/edit/beta like crazy.
It's Teaser time! From 365 Days Until I Disappear.

I love you all!

9 comments:

Karla Calalang said...

This is so sad but beautiful! You have great prose :)

Kaitlin Ward said...

Lovely. I really enjoy your writing.

houndrat said...

Yeah,I agree--lovely, interesting prose. This is very touching. Only thing--the transition between her thinking of Riley and then falling down the stairs was really abrupt--I got a bit confused for a second.

But other than that, this was awesome! I would love to read this story--even if I can already tell it will make me cry! :)

VĂ©ro L said...

This is beautiful. I also had a problem with the transition but that should be easy to fix and then it will be REALLY solid. Gorgeous writing and such a bitter sweet story.

Katie Ashley said...

Your writing is so beautiful and filled with great turns of phrases and awesome descriptions. Srsly, this sentence broke my heart, and I'd love to quote you cuz it's the story of my life!!

"That’s nice, their love permeating the room, but it makes me a little sick too, to know that I’m going to die before I find anything like that."

Sighs!!! Great job and keep it coming!!

Amna said...

Very interesting prose indeed!

I really liked this, kept me hooked until the last word :)

Rebecca A. Rogers said...

Completely Heart-wrenching. I really felt for her. Maybe I'm morbid, but I loved this line for its simplicity:

"I could die like this."

Anonymous said...

This teaser is full of beautiful lines. "November disappearing without me even noticing" and "our goodbyes floating on clouds of breath" and "That’s nice, their love permeating the room, but it makes me a little sick too, to know that I’m going to die before I find anything like that." I hope you're planning on trying to get this published once the book is done.

Annie McElfresh said...

WOW! Srsly, I'm blown away. I was totally in the moment reading this. Great job!