Tuesday, December 15, 2009

Teaser Tuesday

It's time to tease! And it's my birthday tomorrow, which I usually don't announce because the idea of a wait staff singing a rousing chorus of happy birthday while the whole restaurant stares terrifies me. But since you can't sing through the internet, I feel pretty safe.
Here's a piece of 365 Days Until I Disappear.

Snipped

15 comments:

VĂ©ro said...

this is so sad and so sweet. You have a beautiful way with words!

Serena and Selena said...

Awh, I loved this part :'(

Bee said...

You made me cry..it's so beautiful and sad. And your MC voice is so convincing :)

Becca said...

I love, love, LOVE this line:

"The rise and fall of whitewash hills, power lines stretched like tightropes over the distance, mimic my nerves, piano wire taut, making me wish we were crossing state lines to some imaginary place where everything is better."


Your MC's voice is very real and heartbreaking. :)

Jamie B said...

This is so bitter sweet. It's addictive to read. You have a way with descriptions.

Krista Ashe said...

Wow, this is truly amazing...you capture all the emotions with such purity and truth. This paragraph srsly brought tears to my eyes:

The skin on the inside of his wrist is disturbingly delicate, big brothers shouldn’t be so breakable. He pulls his hand from mine and locks it on the scruff of my neck, he’s never been good with affection, but at least the roughness is familiar. Big, calloused hands that lifted me up to look at the ocean, inspected scraped knees, checked for fevers, kept me safe.

*raises hand* I'll be happy to beta read for you!

V said...

Gorgeous.

I'm gonna go cry now. ;)

La-La-La-Laurie said...

I love these descriptions and the way it's so easy to fall right into your mc's story. The characters are really holding their own here. It's very powerful.

Amna said...

A very emotional scene that is written beautifully. Amazing.

Deniz Kuypers said...

I've said this before and I'll say it again: your writing is so beautiful and melancholy and heartfelt. I really connect with it. And happy b-day!!

Kaitlin Ward said...

This story is so sad and so beautiful!

Karla Calalang said...

This is so sad, but I love it. Every single word is perfect and beautiful in the way you string them together to form perfect prose :)

houndrat said...

This really is heartbreaking. :( Very beautiful prose, too.

Oh, and happy b-day! ;)

Melissa said...

beautifully written...each word is piercing and the fact that you can inspire such emotion is a talent :)

happy birthday!!!

inkspatters said...

Your writing is simply gorgeous and this packs a big emotional punch. AND HAPPY BIRTHDAY again :D