Monday, March 22, 2010

Tease!

 I literally just got out of The Crazies - go see it if you haven't - so I'm teasing before I try to sleep, hoping not to be attacked by psycho almost zombies. Also, if the lead in the movie didn't look just like me in 15 years, it would have been less upsetting.
So, here we go. Tease from the middle of the tentatively titled, Weight of This Water. Gimme your feedback on the title, love, hate, brandy new idea I haven't thought of?

snip! you guys are incredible

12 comments:

Tahereh said...

wow i love the vivid descriptions here. your imagery is very well fleshed-out! i really like where this is going!

thanks for sharing!

best of luck with your work :D

Vee said...

Um, wow, what a character dynamic! Absolutely amazing, as always, Liz.

I especially LOVED how she smelt like "saltwater and sunshine" :D

Writing Writerly things said...

Liz this is great! Love the descriptions. I think my fave thing on the teaser is the flow. It's almost as if I'm peeking through a little peephole. I loved this image: Tan girls dot the endless shore...

and btw Weight of this water sounds intriguing. I really like it.

Lynkay

Véro L said...

You have a way with words!Absolutely Beautiful!

Karla Calalang said...

Such beautiful descriptions! I am just in awe! :D

J.S. Wood said...

This is really beautiful!! And leaves so many questions at the same time. I like the title.

Unknown said...

Times like this I'm so jealous of you. This scene is just beautifully written.

Glen Akin said...

Very vivid, very moving. But why does your MC seem to run from Trish when things get rather hot and heavy?

Amanda said...

Really beautiful! I liked your descriptions and the tension between the two.


The title is pretty sweet as well.

Samantha R. said...

I'm so intrigued! Your descriptions are beautiful. :)

Angie said...

Ah you tease! Great sexual tension and some of your descriptions are true gems! Love it.

Annie McElfresh said...

I felt like I was there! I want to see them get together!! Awesome snip my supernatural sister. (He's back this week...YES!!! *does fist pump*) LOL